Hayirli gcler.2 metin yazdimda sunum icin.Hangisi hatasiz,akişkan ve daha iyi ? Tesekkurler.

Birinci metin:

this happened in amity beach, located at south coast of america. a young woman is killed by a shark at the opening event. the mayor explains this brutality as an accident. police office brody wants to investigate this but he can't find support from the public. the beach opens to public again. this time, shark attacks again and kills more people. later, marine biologist matt hooper and shark expert comes to town. brody, hooper and expert sail the sea in order to catch the shark. they fail to catch it. ın a moment of carelessness, the shark kills hooper and his friend. brody throws the oxygen tank into shark's mouth. shark attacks the boat, and brody starts shooting the tank in shark's mouth. ıt results with the shark shot into pieces. the brutality ends.

ıkinci metin:

the stiuation occurs at amity beach in south coasts of america.a young woman is killed by the shark at the inauguration of beach.the mayor said that it was an accident. police chief brody wants to investigate this situation but he could be excluded by the community.the beach opens to people again. this time the shark attacks people again and so many people dies. then marine biologist matt hooper and a shark expert comes to the town .brody, hooper and expert sails to the sea to
catch the shark. they cant catch it a for while. then an accident occurs and the shark kills hooper and his friend. brody throws a scuba to shark to protect himself.the shark attacks to boat and brody shots the scuba in shark's

 

ikinci daha iyi de cümleler kısa ve çok dur-kalk yapıyor insan okurken. mesela şöyle yapabilirsin:

the stiuation occurs at amity beach in south coasts of america where a young woman is killed by the shark at the inauguration of beach. the mayor said that it was an accident while the police chief brody wants to investigate this situation but he could be excluded by the community.

the beach is opened to the public again; however, the shark strikes again, killing many people. then the marine biologist matt hooper and a shark expert comes to the town; sailing with brody to catch the shark. while searching, an accident occurs and the shark kills hooper and his friend. brody throws an oxygen tube to the shark. while the shark tries to bite the tube, brody shots the tube; creating an explosion which tear the shark into pieces; ending the brutality.

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